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What would happen if you said I love you on the phone?

My heart would start pumping,
All my being will start to levitate,

Every fiber of my being,
Will start converging to a single point,

My ears will have difficulties realizing,
What they heard,

My eyes would keep starring,
Starring at the void,

Inside me,
Everything will accelerate,

I will shake,
I will be moved,
I will sweat,

My cells will then mutate,
Transforming everything,
Into happiness and joy,

My sweat drops,
Will cure any illness,

Or if they fell on the floor,
Create a carpet of flowers,

So that I could,
Fell to my knees,
And embrace the life,

The life with you,
The life around you,
The life inside you.
A little something for a little someone...
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LadyxXxBug Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011
Just beautiful :happycry:
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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Quilted-illusions Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010  Student Artist
This is sweet and very good.
Although, I'm not sure if your suppose to have that many commas.
Maybe I'm wrong.-It's been awhile since I read poetry and it's rules.
But I think it's sweet.
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Well I don't really follow any kind of rules. I just write what I feel and that's all.
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Quilted-illusions Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010  Student Artist
Ah, I see.
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DameOdessaStock Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010
Magnifique :)
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Merci :D
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Kallen-Black-Knight Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ohh tursoips tursoips tursoips... ^_^ your poems never fail to amaze me ^_^
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! It's always appreciated!
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Kallen-Black-Knight Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
mind if i draw something out of this?

just not sure if I'll be able to post it...
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Sure go on!
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010
as already said a great poem!
it's happy and yet it kind of has a bitter aftertaste since the title has an IF clause in it :/

it's really a nice idea! and I just can't get over the fact that it reminds me of a certain scene in a yaoi manga I love so much haha ^^;

the last 3 verses are especially beautiful!

tho all of them are something special!

you wrote it really nicely because I actually imagine how it'd be so thumbs up for that!

:+fav:
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah you're right, it's mostly a poem about expectations that will certainly never come true. That's why it's a bit sad, but at the same time you can really imagine the scene and just thinking about it makes you happy. So I like how the sad/happy feelings combines.
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2010
couldn't agree more with what you said right now
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I suppose that's where great spirits meet lol ^^
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2010
could be ;P
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