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Through the looking glass
I see myself,
And I see someone else,
Both are me,
But who should I really be?

On one side,
I'm pretty, naive and my dress is made of soothing colors,
On the other side,
I'm pretty, deadly, and my dress reflects a dark gloom,

The choice,
Breaks my heart as well as the glass,
But does it reflect what I really want?

The glass is all broken now,
And I feel the grip of gloom taking me,
Neither of my attributes will help me,
I need to fall or resist,

I'm leaving myself to fall,
But falling into what I don't know,
Maybe into happiness,
I'm so naive,

I'll wait until I hit the ground,
Then I'll know,
Will it hurt?
Only god knows,

Through the looking glass I've looked,
And I don't see anything good,
Maybe it's all in my mind,
I'm so naive...
Here is a poem inspired by this drawing by :iconlanwu:
Hope you like it, comments are always welcome!

You can listen to me reading it on the 6th episode of my poems podcast here: [link]

Poem detailed explanation:

So as i said in the introduction this poem has been inspired by the picture of LanWu but the fact is that this picture made me remember a book that I really loved, it's a trilogy, from the author Philip Pullman, the first one is pretty known because there was a movie done about it, and I didn't really like it, as it's missing huge very important details that without them you cannot understand the following story. So the first one is called the Golden Compass, the second one is called The subtle knife and the third one is called the amber spyglass, and it's this one that reminded me of this drawing. Without spoiling too much, one of the characters is using a piece of glass, and by applying some kind of grease on it, she's converting into some kind of spyglass.
Also the fact that this drawing has a pretty strong meaning to me, as mirrors can be a pretty useful yet scary thing to some people. It's not only a piece of glass to check your hair, or checking if you shaved well. But it can be a confessing companion, a reminded of your age, or any other magical properties as seen in many movies and books.
So talking about the poem itself now, as always I started by stating the obvious, it's a mirror so I can see myself in it,but the drawing also shows someone else, so I just said it. And as the picture suggests both are wearing the same outfit, and have the same face just one good and the other one evil and I deduced from that it must be the same person. And then I ask the reader the big rhetorical question, who's really the one the character should be?
Then continue describing the action, one is representing all the good there is, and the other one all the bad there is. Also I emphasized on the colors because my favorite color is navy blue, and this character is wearing it, so I wanted to make sure that the reading knew that.
Then I continue asking questions that only the reader can answer by himself, so in doing that I'm not only telling a story but I'm also engaging with the reader.
Continuing in the description process, I pull the action now, the good girl is being grabbed by the evil one, so another question comes here, will she fall or resist? Another place to engage the reader to make his or her own mind about the fate of this.
Then I give my version of the story, I say that the good girl will fall to the evil one, and imagine what is going through her head, these thoughts are mainly hopeful ones. Then I start putting in hopeless thoughts into her head while she's slowing going into gloom. And when you're in despair and you don't know what to do or whom to trust, you turn to god, so that's what I did in the last line of this paragraph.
Then for the big finish I'm going to remind the reader of what this is all about, and what happened, with a glimpse of hope and despair as the final two lines of the poem.
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Soggy-Mog Featured By Owner May 31, 2010
This is good man, I like it :)
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very appreciated!
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DameOdessa Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Tout simplement magnifique :)
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Merci :D Je l'aime beaucoup celui là :D
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Iris-Angelus Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love Alice in Wonderland! :) Great use of imagery. I love it. :)
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I love it too :D Thanks!
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Sunlight-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
It reminds me of Yin and Yang ^^ I like this poem.
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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blackcatsrule Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Student General Artist
I agree with An-chan. Best I've heard from you!! :heart: You expressed the emotion so well, the bewilderment, the confusion, the worry.

Another big fat instant fave from me. :D
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Strange... As I said to An-chan I don't think of this poem as having anything special, but for some reason people are really liking it, I'm glad :D
Thank you for such beautiful comment, really appreciated!
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