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Wonder of nature,
Your scintillating reflections
Fill with wonder children and adults alike.

Your appearance is transitory,
It's also what gives you,
This surprising beauty.

But you are not the exclusiveness of the sky.
Everyone can create one.

Whether it is visible or not,
Is not important,
Where it is,
It brings happiness,
And comfort to whom sees it.

But it can very well,
Be hidden in the memory,
Or in other places.

The heart is a good one,
By winds and evils,
It brings a little gaiety,
Transitory pleasure,
Curing the evils,
Independent of the winds.

This rainbow,
I each times create it on you.
You said it to me,
I believe you.

So that once again it radiates,
Where it's cold.
I write this small selected piece,
Straight out of my heart.

I address it to you,
Through this bridge
That is the arc.

Our two hearts are far,
Like the color feet,
Touching the whiteness,
Of the clouds in tears.

Soon disappeared,
This pretty mirage,
Reflecting in your eyes of mother-of-pearl.

One moment,
An eternity,
Who could say it,
How much I looked at you,
The mirror of the heart I found there.
However it is only friendship.

I offer this rainbow to you,
So that it can transport,
My love at your feet.
For eternity.
And more if affinities.
The original french version can be found here: [link]

You can listen to me live reading it on the 26th episode of my podcast that you can find here: [link]

Poem detailed explanation:


So let's put the background first. For those who have been listening for a while you know that I'm a lover of nature, and thus also love rainbows. I think it's something magical that happens not often enough, so the idea here was to find a way to create rainbows on demand. At the same time I was in love with a girl that said to love rainbows, but unfortunately she couldn't see any anymore because she was blind, I also did it for her, because I wanted to bring her a rainbow even if she couldn't see it.
So to start the usual obvious description to set the tone, it's a wonder of nature, it scintillates and when you see one wether you're a child or an adult you like watching it. Again some obvious stuff, it doesn't last long, and everything that is that ephemeral is bound to be special and in this case specially beautiful. Now we start serious stuff, where I bring the reader into what I really wanted to convey with this poem. Imagination is the most brilliant thing ever, because even if you've never seen something like that you can imagine it, and if you've seen it you can reproduce it in your mind, and it would have the same effect as if you were seeing one for real. That's what i wanted to say here, that wether it's in your mind, in the sky, in paintings, or in drawings it's just as beautiful everywhere.
Because we're talking about love, I had to mention the heart in some way, so here it is. I also wanted to reiterate the fact that rainbows bring happiness, and because in love heart suffers, well a little bit of happiness is welcome. Doing all of that mixing nature and body as if they were one was also something I really wanted to do, because of the transition I wanted to do from 100% nature to 100% human. The next part is a very personal touch, it means that when we were discussing, she said that I was making her happy and by creating rainbows inside her, and that was really a big deal for me, it really strengthen the fact that I absolutely had to write something about it.
Again a reference to happiness but without mentioning it, sometimes you want to repeat the central image of the poem that you want to convey but saying too many times the same word becomes boring so taking back roads to convey it is what makes it really stand out. To make that remember of the basic opposites, that light cancels dark and vice versa, same for cold and heat, and happiness and gloom, with these few opposite words you really can convey a lot.
Then a rainbow looks like a bridge in some way, so I imagined that I was on one side of the rainbow and the girl I was talking to was on the other side of the rainbow, that I used it to convey everything that I wanted to just by crossing it. Then I continue with the same idea and now say that us being at each extremity of the rainbow we're far one from the other, and because we're just at the end and beginning of the rainbow our feet take the color of the rainbow. To make it a little bit more poetic, I said that we were both not on the ground but each on a cloud and that the sadness that we felt was conveyed by the clouds making rain.
As a reminder to the reader, it's a good thing to repeat facts you want to emphasize at the near end, as well as in the beginning, it just make them stick more easily in someone's head, and in this case it's the fact that it's ephemeral. I also added some other references, for example to a mirage that you see in the desert and a second later you don't see it anymore, and because the eyes reflect light and rainbows are mostly made of light, it was only fitting to have them reflect on her eyes.
I really like watching another one's eyes, specially if I love this person, so you might have noticed that this happens quite often in my poems, and this one is no exception. If I could I would certainly be able to star into someone's eyes as long as I could, and for this reason I wrote that it could be an eternity or just a moment, it will depend on the circumstances of the moment. There is a saying that say that the eyes are the mirror of the soul, and I believe it is very true and I wanted to share that here too. However this girl didn't love me back the way I did so I just had to say it and continue with this for the last paragraph where I try to somehow convince her by giving everything that I've written to her, and that as in the fairy tales we could be happy for ever and ever.
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Icarious Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
Your explanation really did a lot in making this a great poem. I mean I went to your podcast page and the way you went through it and explained it, just listening to somebody so passionate about it and who really knew what was being conveyed and not leaving the reader (myself) to wonder, it made me want to love this piece more than the poem itself. I just have to admire the emotion expressed when you talked about it and it was that more than anything that made this beautiful, and really human in my mind. I really can't express how much the reading meant to me in correlation with the poem and vice versa, as an answer to the question of whether you could make readings longer than 15 minutes and people would still listen, I really don't care about the time when it's as expressive as this one was.
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you thank you thank you! Your comment just made my day ^^ Yes this poem is quite special for me, and for sure I'm passionate because I wouldn't be doing this without passion. If you liked this poem check out the other ones I'm sure you'll like them too. Not all of them have detailed explanation though, only those which I recorded on my podcast. If you want explanation on one just tell me and I'll consider it for the next episode. Cheers!
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010
the background of the poem is really wonderful! reminds me of the manga oneshot I recently recomended you. must be awful to be blind :S
andways rainbows are woderful altho I'm not such a greeeat fan of them. Sure I do like to look at them, but I can't say that I'm oh so fascinated by them. Well I am in one way, which is the mistery of how they "come to life" but that's about it :/ I dunno currently I don't feel so amazed by them... perhaps I will later on
anyways the start is nice. I also like how you rendered the obvious parts. Plus I really like the idea that wether you're blind or not near, you can always imagine it. Imagination really is one thing that's soo valuable, which you cannot buy but everyone wants.

the raibow sure does look like and actually is a bridge in my opinion.
I love it how you made the rainbow some sort of a bridge between you and the girl, it's really a nice idea and especially the crying part is wonderful!

the last two paragraphs are also really wonderful yet sad and tragic. The eternity part was just so sweet! just like in a fairytale, altho this one has a bitter end :C

anyways lovely poem and I must say, that the metaphors and rendering of words in this poem was briliant! great job!
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Well everyone has his own taste and if you don't like rainbows that much then There's nothing I can do for you ^^
Indeed that the imagination is a very powerful thing as well as a valuable one. I'm glad you like it.
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2010
true xD
well I do like them but it's not as if I was obsessed with them
I wouldn't cry a river if I missed to see one haha xD
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I see... Well I wouldn't cry either ^^ lol
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2010
hehehe
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Kallen-Black-Knight Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, this is really amazing. so beautiful and inspiring... please keep up the good work ^_^
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much it's very appreciated!
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Stripysonofagun0965 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010
Woah...nice, this is wayy better than all my stories put together :XD:
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