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On a bench by =tursiops33:icontursiops33:

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On a bench

I'm lying on the bench
And I'm thinking
These thoughts make me smile
They bring me to another world,

One where I can do anything
Talk to anyone,
Be anything I want,

I'm a school girl,
But I'm really much more,

I like staring at the void,
So that my mind forgets
All of the real world,

As I do that,
My heart suddenly
Fills With emotions,
Of everything I should be,
Of everything I want to be,

I'm cute,
I know I can do it,
I just have to wish for it,

Because one's will,
Is the greatest of all.
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Author's Comments

This poem was inspired by the following picture: [link] by :iconlavender-ice:

Hope everyone likes it as much as I did writing it.

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:icontrauermei:
~Trauermei Jun 23, 2009, 2:14:54 PM
I certainly see the picture in the poem. Nice job!
:icontursiops33:
=tursiops33 Jun 23, 2009, 2:15:42 PM
Thank you! Your comment is really appreciated!

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Poems in english at: [link]
Poèmes en français [link]
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We are all angels with only one wing and we can only fly by embracing each other.
:iconsunlight-angel:
~Sunlight-Angel Jun 24, 2009, 2:56:50 AM
Oh, this poem is fanatstic. I can see myself in this one, too XD (*often dreams far away*) You can express emotions really good
:icontursiops33:
=tursiops33 Jun 24, 2009, 3:11:39 AM
Thank you.

--
Poems in english at: [link]
Poèmes en français [link]
Dolphins at: [link]

We are all angels with only one wing and we can only fly by embracing each other.
:iconakiko-sama:
=akiko-sama Jun 25, 2009, 2:22:16 AM
I'm cute
this sentence is the only thing that doesn't aply to me xDD (first thing I noticed lol xDDD)

but other than that I feel so much similarities. Like you sneaked into my mind and wrote it after...

I do that alot of times x'D
(especially when I'm drunk... tho then I don't keep my thoughts to myself lol ... btw in drunk-times this pose is called "the thinker" ;))

but the poem is really beautiful. It represents the picture well in my opinion!

and this Because one's will,
Is the greatest of all. is the best since the birth of the computer!

I love it oh so much!!

a big fat FAVE from me =D

--
When you cease to dream, you cease to live!
:icontursiops33:
=tursiops33 Jun 25, 2009, 10:17:56 AM
Well you're cute anyway so that applies to you :P
Well I wrote it thinking mostly of myself and a little about the girl in the drawing :P
And as you know we're kind of alike so it doesn't surprise me that you feel like it's the same for you.
Well when I'm drunk I don't really think, so it's not really something relevant for me :P
And the because of one's will is the greatest of all I took it from MKR :P Which makes it the best anime since the birth of computer :P
Thanks pretty lady! Your fave is really appreciated!

--
Poems in english at: [link]
Poèmes en français [link]
Dolphins at: [link]

We are all angels with only one wing and we can only fly by embracing each other.
:iconakiko-sama:
=akiko-sama Jun 26, 2009, 2:47:05 AM
=3=
hehe that's true xD

hahah you twisted that out pretty well you sleeze you~ ;P
my BIG FAT fave that is ;P

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When you cease to dream, you cease to live!
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