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For my soulmate:

For my soulmate I write
For my soulmate I play
For my soulmate I sing

I write because I care,
I write because I love,
I write because I feel,

I play because I like,
I play because I hear,
I play because I touch,

I sing because I cry,
I sing because It hurts,
I sing because it heals,

When I write down my feelings,
I like to confess that my heart,
Is the sole property of the one I sing,

When I play on this piano,
And when I touch the keys,
I hear my composed love song,

When I sing it's to get all the hurting,
It's to get all the crying,
Out to make room for the healing.
This poem was inspired by my secret muse that I know doesn't want more publicity because she'll turn red as a tomato :P
And also by this picture:
You can listen to me live reading it on the 13th episode of my podcast that you can find here: [link]

Poem detailed explanation:

This poem is quite special because I wrote it with several inspirations in mind. First I was having a conversation about love with my muse on how the love is a double edged sword, and by taking her opinion on the subject and mine as well, I knew I had to write something, I know I have to write something when my stomach is burning and my head is spinning with words left and right. On a side note inspiration is very volatile so you cannot just say that's something good, I'll write about it later, because later you will not remember a damn thing about it. And even if you remember something the momentum that was there before is not here anymore, and whatever you're going to write will not be as good as what you would have written then. So to come back to the main subject here, when I knew I had to write something I didn't want to just go and write, I was missing just the little spark to ignite the whole thing. This spark I knew I would find it checking all the favorite pictures that I've collected for this matter. So when I saw this beautiful picture of the girl playing piano and the beautiful landscape I knew I had the perfect picture for this. Also because of the title of the picture, which became the title of the poem, meaning "For my soulmate" and because my muse is also my love, that couldn't fit better.
Then about the structure of the poem itself my favorite number is the number 3, that's why I often do paragraphs of 3 lines in my poems, I think it's really a great number. Also I wanted to do something special for this poem, because it was after all for someone special. So I said to myself, I'm going to write 3 times the same sentence only changing the last word, and that's what I did. Then I took each of those 3 words and and I started 3 more paragraph with these words. And I did the same kind of structure for those, write 3 times the same sentence only changing the last word, then I though well it would be really neat if for the end I took each 3 words of each 3 paragraph and used them to write the 3 last paragraphs. So I started to write my lines and both inspired by my discussion and the picture, and when I was at the end I checked that I used all the words, and that it was correct. But it was not, so I started to modify try to think of other ways to put each sentence, and so on, but it just didn't work, it was not as good as the original one, and sometimes you just have to keep what you like best instead of try to keep that second though you had, because well they're called second thoughts for a reason.
So how did I choose which final words I was going to use each time. Well for the first 3 lines I just told myself, well I'm writing right now, so let's put write, then in the picture the girl was playing the piano, so let's put play second, and she's also certainly singing a song, so let's put that last. Then I asked myself, why do I write, well I'm writing this poem because I care for the one I'm writing it to, so that was the first one. Then I though well let's use for derivatives of the word care, and because I also love her, I put love second. Then I thought well you feel love don't you? So I put feel 3rd.
Then with the second paragraph: I'm asking myself the same questions as before, why do I play? Well I like to play this instrument, so I put like first. Then when you play you and others hear what you're playing, so I put hear second. And finally when you're playing the piano you're touching the notes as you play, so I put touch 3rd.
Then I thought well every poem, every story must have a bad part because it's not funny if there is not. So I though well why does the girl sing? Well she can sing because she might have cried before, or the song is so sad she might want to start crying, so I put cry first. Then I though well what does love do that's bad, well it hurts people, so let's put hurt second. And then I wanted a strong word to balance all this negativity, and I put heal 3rd.
Then I started to pick the word I wrote before to make new sentences with them. So I took the first 3 words of the first paragraph, and I tried to acomodate them in the sentence best I could. Also thinking of what the girl in the picture could feel inside, and what I was feeling inside for my muse too.
Then I couldn't fit all other words of the 3rd paragraph so I only fitted two. Also I know we don't touch keys when we play but we stroke them, though the word stroke didn't fit well in this poem, so I changed it.
So for the grand finale, I wanted the last 3 lines to be in the same spirit than the last 3 lines of the 4th paragraph, 2 strong bad lines, and one stronger good line, and that's what I did, using the 3 words in the same paragraph.
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xXAllieBomboziXx Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I think this poem is beautiful, I favorited it a while ago but i never had the time to comment, i would be completely speachless if i was the person who this was for!
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for this nice comment, yes she enjoyed it a lot.
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xXAllieBomboziXx Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
that is wonderful! It is very cool how you would write this for her, it shows that you obviously care for her a lot :D
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, she was very pleased indeed. And yeah I care for her a lot, that's for sure!
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xXAllieBomboziXx Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
that is awesome! i'm happy for you two :D
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It is indeed, thank you.
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mmp123 Featured By Owner May 27, 2010
Its absolutely beautiful <3
My heart skipped a beat at the last verse =')
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner May 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :D I'm glad you liked it.
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TheDoomGeneration Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010
I agree with everyone! It is beautiful!
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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TheDoomGeneration Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
your very welcome!!!
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
my pleasure!
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Ikymasu Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2010
SO sweet!
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Ikymasu Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2010
:iconbigsmileplz:
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blackcatsrule Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Student General Artist
How sweet~! :love: I love the last line the best. It's great close to the poem. :)
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I really like it too!
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
lovely poem as always dear!

I love the play with words
it's like you said them all in one breath!

also the last verse sounds like the "blade of love" that we were talking about not long ago. It's like it has two sides! like the idea!

also the piano you included into the poem is perfect! piano + love songs = MELT!

really like it!
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BTW on a totaly random note
check this piano piece out
it always chers me up and it makes me sad, lonely, happy, loved... basicaly alot of emotions when I listen to it
it's such a pretty piece!
[link]
one of my alltime fave!
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blackcatsrule Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2010  Student General Artist
:heart::heart::heart: ;A; This song always makes me wish I never quit piano. It's so lovely, and I totally agree with you when you say you go through a chain of different emotions while listening to this. So pretty. :heart::love::heart:

Amelie's sounds lovely too! :heart: I like how it goes slow in the beginning and faster and louder. :)
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2010
this song always makes me wish I could play piano haha xDD
right? it's just so pretty...
I also really like this one from him kiss the rain so sad and touching in my opinion and kinda nostalgic (makes you think about the past)
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blackcatsrule Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2010  Student General Artist
Kiss the Rain, I listened to that one too. All of them are prettifulz~ :heart::heart::heart: Never to late to start learning piano again. xD Maybe I'll take classes in college.
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2010
pretty indeed!
it's never to late yes....
I can een play a song on the piano!! Twinkle twinkle little star 8D *headdesk*
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blackcatsrule Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2010  Student General Artist
Hahaha!! Hey look, I can play the ABC song!! It's the same melody as Twinkle Twinkle Little Star! 8D *headpiano*
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2010
awesome!!!!!!!! damn we're sooo good!
we should seriously play in grand hall concerts and not only in our dreams!

mankind doesn't know what great talent it's missing (us) 8D
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blackcatsrule Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2010  Student General Artist
Like I know right??! 8DDDD

Let's go get reservations for the stage now and host a concert with 100$ price tickets!! 8DD
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you darling!
Indeed, it was inspired by that too :P
Hehe ^^ Well I wanted some more inspiration and the first picture on my fav list whas this one, so it was perfect, with a perfect title too ^^
Thanks for all these favs ^^

I find the piano song to be a meh on my liking meter. I really prefer something like this: [link]
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
it sure is a pretty picture that's for sure!
and you're welcome

=3= oh well people don't have the same taste... still I prever the River flows in you rather than your from Amelie...
Mine is just more... romantic, heartbreakingly tuned something like that :) (my opinion)

this one from Amelie makes me kinda feel like being in a forest after rainy when it's getting warm and spirits are awakening again....
hahaha sorry I guess it sounds weird...
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It is indeed, that's why it's in my fav list :P

Yeah from time to time we will not have the same taste :P
Well maybe because it's the music from twilight and that I'm not a twilight fan at all... But on the other hand I really like Amelie.

Well you have to call is as you see it, so if for you it's like that, then it's like that ^^
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
nooooo it's not from twilight at all!!! people just add it however and wherever they want. it's NOT a twilight theme or whatever
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Strange... because I saw the name of this song all over youtube with twilight associated with it.
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2010
well I can asure you it wasn't used in the Twilight movie (watched it)
I would have noticed such a lovely piano play
as for new moon I haven't watched it ye... tho I( highly doubt they use this song... it doesn't fit the twilight saga at all... my opinion tho...
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
oh ok... strange strange...
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lyra-puu Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010   Photographer
Beautiful.
Your soulmate is a lucky person :), those are very lovely feelings you have there :heart:
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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imaduckyrawr Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
this is really cute. i love it <3
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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imaduckyrawr Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
no problem :D
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