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First kiss

An intense look,
An extreme feeling,
Heart tightens,

Nothing matters anymore,
Happiness without cloud,
The beats are being heard,

The lips are touching,
The beings merge,
It is paradise,

In my memory is written,
This so magnificent time,
This ideal so perfect.
Original french version at: [link]
You can listen to me reading it and explaining all about it on the 9th episode of my poems podcast that you can find here:
[link]

Poem detailed explanation:

This is the most popular poem I've written to date, and I though it would only be fitting to include it in the podcast, so here it goes!
The poem is quite short, yet very powerful. Most people when they're asked what they felt about love, they cannot describe it, they say you have to live it to know what it feels like. In some way I can understand that, but as poetry is a bit like story telling, it wouldn't make a very good poem or story if I just said try it for yourself. So I hope this will bring memories to the people who already did it and encourage those who haven't. So now for the poem in itself, to put things in context here is a little background of the situation: My girlfriend and I were in the cinema and in Switzerland were I come from there is always a break in the middle of the movie, so it happened there.
The intense look was so intense that I can still vividly remember it, I asked her if she was ok, and she said she has never been better. Now that's where the extreme feeling comes in, because you're always glad to hear that kind of thing, coupled with the intense look it gives the tightening of the heart, so that was the first part.
Then I was so absorbed by her intense look that I was like in a bubble, I instantly forgot that I was in a cinema, and that there were people around, and there's where the happiness without clouds comes in, because you cannot be into the void even when you're in your own world, and I replaced the cinema with a beautiful no-cloudy day.
Then I don't know if you ever experienced or heard your own heart beating, it's kind of creepy but at the same time considering the situation it gives you such a rush of… something… There is where the lips touching part comes in, as while I was intensely looking into her eyes I was coming closer each time to her, and I finally came close enough to kiss. Then I would describe the feeling only as a merge of the two people, and I can add that for me it was paradise.
Then as said before I can remember this so vividly that that's what I wanted to finish the poem with, just emphasize with every important aspect of the poem, meaning: The memory I got from it, the feeling of joy and peacefulness, and the kind of heaven state I was in.

My good friend :icongarun: even made a picture inspired by this poem:
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sampea Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014
Ah...first kisses. One of the best memories, ever!
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're absolutely right! 
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Anerolll Featured By Owner May 23, 2010
So nice ^^
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner May 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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Sunlight-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
*sigh* well done ^-^
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Sunlight-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome ^^
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blackcatsrule Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2010  Student General Artist
One of my favorite ones! :heart:

Haven't had my first kiss yet...wonder when it'll be. xD
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Well try to find a good boy and it'll happen nicely :D
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NamineArtist Featured By Owner May 2, 2008
Nami: Aw! Me likey! I NEED to experience that! -_- I feel so left out in these years! T^T Anyways, good job!
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner May 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I wish you will experience that soon. It's really a great pleasure than to kiss someone you really love.
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NamineArtist Featured By Owner May 3, 2008
Nami: Aw......I should....Hm....must find someone....o.o *skips away*
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner May 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I know it's the same for everyone ^^
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NamineArtist Featured By Owner May 3, 2008
Nami: Mhm....*raises fist* I shall find one! >.< XD Uh.....maybe on Monday....XD
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner May 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
That's fast! Hope you will!
Then you'll tell me what it was like!
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NamineArtist Featured By Owner May 4, 2008
Nami: Okay! Yay! Hm....I'll probably need help on finding the right one....probably take a while....hmmmmm.....oh well! :glomp:
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tursiops33 Featured By Owner May 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
You have time ^^
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Konoko1990 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2008
Aww this really nice ^_^ so fluffy, real sweet and cute, your own experience best to say your own words ^_^
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner May 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly!
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:iconkonoko1990:
Konoko1990 Featured By Owner May 1, 2008
very much ^_^
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:iconsinginchic7:
Singinchic7 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
so true... my first kiss was very much like that
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Good! That is what it should be like ^^
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:iconsinginchic7:
Singinchic7 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
yup!! My best kiss left me shaking! if that isn't passion i dunno what is!
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
That's definitely it!
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008
waaaaaw!! a really nice one!! *----*

thought i did kiss on the lips a couple of times... but i didn't have a french kiss yet... and those kisses weren't soo "magnificent" at all *at least it's my oppinion*
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
You are absolutely right!
Nothing better than a good (french) kiss :D
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008
blah... i can't tell... i haven't done it yet T__T
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I hope that your first one will be as good as mine described here :D
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akiko-sama Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2008
i hope even better! :P
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I hope so :D
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TohruHondaSan Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2008
awesome!
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:icontursiops33:
tursiops33 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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TohruHondaSan Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2008
*--*
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